Paragraph revision:
Original: Connecting Ungar/Scheuer to my preferred idea of liberal arts learning
Scheuer and Ungar present a rough model of a liberal arts education as encompassing many different topics of studies and skills all in one curriculum. Due to this it is reasonable that Ungar does not believe in vocationalism since this way of thinking only strives for students to have practical skills in their major so they can get a job much “faster” and easier than their peers in liberal arts. In his article he states, “the ‘career education’ bandwagon seems to suggest that shortcuts are available to students that lead directly to high-paying jobs—leaving out ‘frills’ like learning how to write and speak well, how to understand the nuances of literary texts and scientific concepts, how to collaborate with others on research” (Ungar, para 4). Ungar points out that the idea of “career education” leaves out the learning of very important skills to have when looking for a job. If you can’t communicate your ideas well/in a way for others to understand them, it will be a way harder time for you to get that high paying job and it will be even harder to maintain your position if you don’t know those skills. If you go to a trade school then practical skills will help you get a job faster since trades are a lot more hands on. But even then, a liberal arts education would give the students who believe in vocationalism a broader range of skills especially with communications and writing. Scheuer builds off of Ungars’ idea of a career education not being enough in the long run by giving a rough definition of what a liberal arts education usually looks and feels like. Scheuer describes a liberal arts education as “an evolving system, consisting of stable but impermanent fields of inquiry that fuse at some points and fissure at others, adapting to cultural shifts while sharing a common language and assumptions, overlapping knowledge bases, and the core of critical thinking.” (para. 14). Both Scheuer and Ungar understand that a liberal arts education model must include topics of study that build on communication and critical thinking skills at the very least.
Revised: Connecting Ungar/Scheuer to my preferred idea of liberal arts learning
Scheuer and Ungar present a rough model of a liberal arts education as encompassing many different topics of studies and skills all in one curriculum. Ungar discusses the idea of a career education for the fact that that type of curriculum under prepares students in multiple areas. It is reasonable for Ungar to disagree with the idea of vocationalism for the fact that this way of thinking only strives for students to have practical skills in their major. In his article he states, “the ‘career education’ bandwagon seems to suggest that shortcuts are available to students that lead directly to high-paying jobs—leaving out ‘frills’ like learning how to write and speak well, how to understand the nuances of literary texts and scientific concepts, how to collaborate with others on research” (Ungar, para 4). Ungar points out that the idea of “career education” leaves out the learning of very important skills to have when looking for a job. A liberal arts education would give the students who believe in vocationalism a broader range of skills especially with communications and writing. The inability to communicate your ideas in an effective way can cause much confusion, so learning effective reading, writing, and speaking skills is very important for job life and professionalism. While Ungar explains the shortcomings of a career education, Scheuer gives a rough definition explaining exactly why a typical career education is not enough. Scheuer describes a liberal arts education as “an evolving system, consisting of stable but impermanent fields of inquiry that fuse at some points and fissure at others, adapting to cultural shifts while sharing a common language and assumptions, overlapping knowledge bases, and the core of critical thinking.” (para. 14). Both Scheuer and Ungar understand that a liberal arts education model must include topics of study that build on communication and critical thinking skills. These skills help students in every course of a liberal arts education and can be applied to our personal lives in the future which make an individual well rounded and prepared.
Explanation: I revised my first body paragraph because of the peer review session. It was evident that I was really just summarizing what the quotes said and did not tie back to the claim at the beginning of the paragraph. So I incorporated a few of the new coordination sentences into the paragraph and added new statements/claims before the quotes to hopefully make it more clear what I am trying to accomplish in that paragraph.
